My life has always been
Just like a roller-coaster ride
Testing my journey with highs and lows
I always chose to move along the tide.
Never expected my life to take such a turn
That my tuned life became unversed
I lost the love of the girl who has my heart
What did I do to deserve such a curse?
With you I laughed , I cherished
Without you I cried , I perished
With you the sun overhead was bright
Without you the eclipse shadowed the light.
You were right that you craved perfection
And I am overflowing with flaws
You fulfilled your “ well-wisher’s “ desire to leave me
I am sure they will give you an applause.
You may find a man worthy of your stature
But I bet no one can love you more
I will still be waiting for you forever
All you gotta do is open the door.
again d biggest hit poem of d millenium..........yaar akm 4rm where do u get such inspiration.......
ReplyDeletetruly..... awsm, blossom, superb, fantastically, fantabulas bole to rapchundas work........... waiting 4 nxt big hit!!!!!!!!!
awesome..:)))..kp it upp...!!!
ReplyDeletesimply fantabulous.......
ReplyDeleteare chaaapu!!
ReplyDeleteWoah Modi...good work man..simple, lucid and the best part it communicates...thumbs up:):)
ReplyDeleteps: Dude..INSPIRATION??
i truly fell in love wid d 3rd stanza...i swear u doing a gr8 job...n yea who do u get d inspiration 4m??
ReplyDeleten d last line also....awesum!!!
ReplyDeleteGenuine Doubt:
ReplyDeleteDo you really believe that on "opening the door"[ time range:0<t<∞ {0 refers to the time when the so called "curse" falls on you which "eclipses your light" , t denotes the time (P.S the measurements are in your inertial reference frame for its not absolute)when "the door opens" and ∞ is the mathematical representation of "forever"]SHE would stumble into the very same AkM [same w.r.t the parameters 'loving' and earnestly 'waiting']of course taking into consideration the whole world of multi-faceted and diverse variables you are sure to encounter in your pompous "roller-coaster ride"?
I take the trouble to write this not to criticize your poem rather to ask for a favour.Please satisfy my doubt , I need the answer.
Always grateful.
Opinion about the poem:
ReplyDeleteThe poem seems biased. SHE has been depicted as a heartless scoundrel and you are a tragic hero. If it were rightly so, then I am sorry to say dude you wasted your time.Reasons:
1)She didn't deserve the poem.
2)The poem should have had a positive and happy mood. Imagine using the words 'unversed' ,'curse'.
Opinion about the poem:
ReplyDeleteThe poem seems biased. SHE has been depicted as a heartless scoundrel and you are a tragic hero. If it were rightly so, then I am sorry to say dude you wasted your time.Reasons:
1)She didn't deserve the poem.
2)The poem should have had a positive and happy mood. Imagine using the words 'unversed' ,'curse'.
OMG!!!!ur poem is da perfect epitome f da idiom-da pen is mightier dan da sword.ur poems r an eye opener-dey throw ample light on da fact dat pain n love can b expressed in a a few strokes f da pen,in da most beautiful way imaginable!!!u r truly a poetic stalwart n bein a student f literature myself i kno wat it takes to b a versatile poet!!!KEEP IT UP
ReplyDeletefine work.but the real essence is missing.but still nice imagination.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all I would like to thank all of u for your valuable comments....
ReplyDeleteAnd special thanks to u sourabh my friend for reading the poem so closely and raising the genuine doubt abt it.....and I would just say that people change and evolve with each passing moment...and I never said abt being the same old person but the love being strong enough to bury the differences and continue the reationship lucidly....actually d poem tries to portray the helplessness,anger,heartbreak,golden past and also the discussed man's love to his beloved who is ready to wait for her forever....
I hope I have been successful in satisfying some of ur doubts....Do write if u have further doubts....and keep posting ur valuable comments
Thank you everybody!!!!!!
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